They won't be in a scene order.
DO NOT POST NEW REPORTS HERE. (locking to prevent posting)
Scene # 100
when choosing the difficulty on super easy:
Mode aimed ..... a sim game before!". Also for those ....
You have an !, a " and a . do you really need an exclamation mark and a period?
On easy: the comma "...setting, but..." looks different than the other ones
EDIT by Cheese - FIXED
I dunno if this is a capital error but "elf king" is a title right? Shouldn't it be "Elf King"? Till next time~
EDIT by Phlebas - "Elf King" as well "Elf Kingdom" FIXED in whole script.
Riannon says:
I want to strip off the sad fate that has come upon everyone.....
I want it come to an end with just me alone.
it should be:
I want to strip off the sad fate that has come upon everyone.....
I want it to come to an end with just me alone.
EDIT by Phlebas - FIXED
also, and this could be the way I am reading it:
Soldier B says:
What are you laughing at! Stay where you are!
should it not be:
What are you laughing at? Stay where you are!
or even
What are you laughing at?! Stay where you are!
EDIT by Phlebas - RESOLVED
Drwc says:
Now, I have this world's greatest taboo within my grasp. A great calamity, a secret that will destroy the word.
Shouldn't it be:
Now, I have this world's greatest taboo within my grasp. A great calamity, a secret that will destroy the world.
EDIT by Phlebas - FIXED
Nitpick here: capitalization after the ellipsis
1. I cleared my mind… And gazed upwards… at our tribe's guardian star.----->I cleared my mind…… and gazed upwards… at our tribe's guardian star.
EDIT by Phlebas - RESOLVED
I suppose it works, but it sounds strange.:not-never
2. Not getting too close, that silver, serene light.---->Never getting too close, that silver, serene light.
EDIT by Phlebas - changed
Scene #110
– “hold in her my arms” ---> “hold her in my arms”
EDIT by Phlebas - FIXED
Scene 2704 - They're died bright red --> They're dyed bright red
EDIT by Phlebas - FIXED
Scene #0355
Morgan says
Boars are way more delicious that frogs!
It should be
Boars are way more delicious than frogs!
EDIT by Phlebas - fixed
2.The oath of the First Soldier of the Gael tribe to be the sword of the chief, to follow him as his shield, and to protect him to the end."----> The oath of the First Soldier of the Gael tribe is to be the sword of the chief, to follow him as his shield, and to protect him to the end."
EDIT by Phlebas: changed
#112
red-maned?
1. "As soon as my brother left me in charge, many red-maned soldiers came……"
Edit by Phlebas: Refers to their helmets, don't really see a problem with it
#230
1. "Regius……the name of the star of kings, shining in the heavens?----> "Regius……the name of the Star of Kings, shining in the heavens?
EDIT by Phlebas: FIXED
#2601
EDIT:hair-->air, that---->than
1. "I was stretching my hands high in the hair, when I noticed soap bubbles floating in front of me. I casually reached out to them, but…… they were farther away that I thought. ----> I was stretching my hands high in the air, when I noticed soap bubbles floating in front of me. I casually reached out to them, but…… they were farther away than I thought.
EDIT by Phlebas: fixed.
#360
1. "What you are you saying? You have the surliest face of all!"----> "What are you saying? You have the surliest face of all!"
EDIT by Phlebas: FIXED
#0112
Drwc:
"Arghhhh" to "Arghhhh!"
Punctuation.
EDIT by Phlebas: FIXED
Pirates.
#03302
Arawn:
"Haha, what a stupid brother. 'The crab shell is thorny, so your brother will peel it off for you! It would be a disaster if my precious sister got hurt, so don't even touch it!' Or somesuch?"
"... Or some such?"
EDIT by Phlebas - Working as intended
#27061
Epona:
"Huhuhu, they say that moeny govens even the afairs of hell."
Spell check, "even the affairs of hell."
EDIT by Phlebas: FIXED
Scene #: 0130_Btl
Every enemy has no name, except one which is Undead Soldier.
Shouldn't the other undead be named Undead?
EDIT by Cheese: FIXED
Scene #0110:
Drwc says:
Hahaha.....
This age of iron....
Shouldn't it be Age of Iron. In the voiceover just after the first save Age of Gold and Age of Bronze were capitalized, so one would think Age of Iron would follow suit.
EDIT by Phlebas: probably a good point, I'll search all the scripts for mention of the ages and uppercase.
Scene #200:
"Yes, it's without a doubt Drwc-sama's"
There's a missing period at the end of the sentence.
EDIT by Phlebas: FIXED
Scene #210:
"Festina Lente.
"Make haste slowly".......?"
It should use ' ' instead of " " in that case for the 'make haste slowly'.
EDIT by Phlebas: FIXED
"........ T, thats."
There's a missing appostrophe.
EDIT by Phlebas: FIXED
Scene #300:
"It's about the 'Elven Race'" should be "It's about the 'Elven Race'." (missing period)
EDIT by Phlebas: FIXED
"Now, now Ermin
If you don't [...]"
Missing period after 'Ermin'.
EDIT by Phlebas: FIXED
Not scene related:
The info of the castle part in the outside part state the Gael tribe as Gale tribe.
EDIT by Cheese: FIXED
"He's believes it's revenge for his father." to "He believes it's revenge for his father."
EDIT by Phlebas - FIXED
Also when mentioning the word "elf" E is not capitalized, I thought it should be since it's the name of the race.
EDIT by Phlebas - working as intended, elf doesn't need to be capitalized any more than "human" (fixed specific names of the races tho, see below).
#400
Gale Stew -> Gael Stew (while I'm at it, fixing all instances of "Gael Stew" into uppercase so don't need to report those). FIXED
Uppercased House Elf/Elves, Seal Elf/Elves, Miner Elf/Elves, Mountain Elf/Elves, Shoemaker Elf/Elves throughout the script, if you spot any other forms please report. FIXED
2601
1.I was stretching my hands high in the hair, when I noticed soap bubbles floating in front of me. I casually reached out to them, but…… they were farther away that I thought.----> I was stretching my hands high in the air, when I noticed soap bubbles floating in front of me. I casually reached out to them, but…… they were farther away than I thought.
EDIT by Phlebas - fixed
2505
1. Inside, your know what the answer is, right?"----> Inside, you know what the answer is, right?"
EDIT by Phlebas - fixed
6051
wording maybe?
1. "On my signal, charge through! Kick around the enemies and keep going until we get to the top of the wall!"
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
scene 2311 - These are just your desserts. before: These are your just desserts.
EDIT by Phlebas: working as intended, i.e. "this is what you deserve".
#2410
"I, I'm fine......ah...... ...... I'm.....just fine, so......!!"
Limwris's box doesn't appear in that line (one that shows who is thinking/talking)
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
#2505
Llyr
"No. I Just......"
Shouldn't that be a comma? Or an ellipsis?
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
#2505
I held back her legs, as she reflexively tried to close them. Lly's inner thighs stiffened and shook.
Llyr's name spelt wrong.
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
Scene #111:
"Arawn... the beloved child of chaos! Denizen of the great darness that gave birth to the light! The lord of the long awaited end!"
"Arawn... the beloved child of chaos! Denizen of the great darness that gave birth to the light! The lord of the long-awaited end!" (Missing hyphen)
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
Scene #112:
"He's far more of an idiot even than you."
"He's far more of an idiot than even you." (Reversed order of words)
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
Scene #113:
"Silence, you have nothing to do with it so shut up!"
"Silence, you have nothing to do with it, so shut up!" (Adding the comma may be an improvement if the clauses are separate... probably unneeded, but I'll leave this here since I already typed it.)
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
Scene #351:
"But, now... now, I want to take a leave of absense."
"But, now... now, I want to take a leave of absence." (Misspelling)
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
Scene #360:
"We're already halted."
"We've already halted." (Both versions work, but I think "we've" would work better as a reply...)
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
"We are the Holy Empire's 6th Victorius Corps, 3rd Frontier Defense Battalion, 7th Squadron."
I'm assuming "Victorius" is a name, so this sentence is correct; however, if "Victorious" was intended, there's a misspelling.
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved (It's a name)
Scene #393:
"Then, you're the greedy master of troupe a of gladiators?"
"Then, you're the greedy master of a troupe of gladiators?" (Reversed order of words)
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
"Octavia... If you were born in a house of imperial knights you should understand."
"Octavia... If you were born in a house of imperial knights then you should understand." (Missing some sort of conjunction... a comma would work too, I suppose)
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
Scene #2410:
Making a wet sound, Limwris lightly bit at me with her lips.
Is "at" intended?
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
Scene #2501:
It seems I got hurt hunting with everyone earlier.
It seems I got hurt while/whilst hunting with everyone earlier. (Missing word)
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
Scene #2602:
I don't know when she got back, but Ermin was staring intently at us right near by.
I don't know when she got back, but Ermin was staring intently at us right nearby. (nearby is a whole word)
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
Scene #2707:
I ended up having to buy a dress, and returned to my room.
The name box shows Epona as the one thinking, but it should show Arawn.
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
Scene #3302:
"Seriously?! In that case, your brother passed out drunk so just ditch him.
"Seriously?! In that case, your brother passed out drunk, so just ditch him". (Adding the comma may be an improvement if the clauses are separate... probably unneeded, but I'll leave this here since I already typed it.)
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
Scene #3501:
"Don't lose heart. Rest easy. I'll eat it for you. Even if I don't look it, I'm a devoted woman!"
"Don't lose heart. Rest easy. I'll eat it for you. Even if I don't look like it, I'm a devoted woman!" (Missing word)
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
General:
Should I be seeing double ellipsis everywhere? It seems excessive... but perhaps everyone just takes long pauses while speaking, heh.
EDIT by Cheese: That's how it is in the original. The JRPGS are in love with ellipses.
Oh, and a completely unrelated suggestion: A central listing of previously reported errors would be nice. For example, after something is fixed, just copy it into the first post so people don't have to read each page to ensure they aren't reporting something that has already been fixed. FIXED
scene 0980 - Cay we fight shoulder to shoulder once again? -> Can we ..
EDIT by Cheese: RESOLVED
In scene #0110, Drwc says:
Arawn.....
The name of the demon king who will reign over the destruction of this collapsing world....
EDIT by Cheese: RESOLVED
and in the description of gael village, gael itself is spelled as gale
EDIT by Cheese: RESOLVED
Scene#: 0310 - Limwris
Original Version
"No, I've heard that the Gates of Life were sealed by Pwyll-sama. Even though I'd heard that the only ones who could open it are you and he......I've disgraced myself! I'm so sorry, I'm so sorry!"
Corrected Version
"No, I've heard that the Gates of Life were sealed by Pwyll-sama. Even though I'd heard that the only ones who could open it are you and him......I've disgraced myself! I'm so sorry, I'm so sorry!"
EDIT by Cheese: RESOLVED: - he is correct in this case: http://www.kentlaw.edu/academics/lrw/gr ... onouns.htm
(However, 'it' should be changed to 'them', so thanks for bringing this sentence to attention.)
Scene#: 0310 - Limwris
Original Version
"Forgive my delay in saying, I am the house elf Limwris. Pleased take good care of me. She is also a house elf, my apprentice......"
Corrected Version
"Forgive my delay in saying, I am the house elf Limwris. Please take good care of me. She is also a house elf, my apprentice......"
Notes: "Please take good care of me." --- Still doesn't seem right...
EDIT by Cheese: RESOLVED
Scene#: sys_kyoten
In recruit screen, when selecting girl, and looking at the help message for Priestess, it seems like words are cutoff, or is it supposed to end with but...
EDIT by Cheese: RESOLVED: - it's intended
I think ドルウク should be "Doruuku" ( or in English, is sounds as Doruck or Doruke). I think Doruuku better than Drwc.
EDIT by Cheese: RESOLVED - Drwc is the official spelling: http://leaf.aquaplus.co.jp/product/ttt/index.html
In scene 100:
Dwrc: " I am the High Priest of Holy Empire, Drwc. Listen well, you savages!"
What do you think if putting a common between "you" and "savages" or "Listen well, savage people!" ( I base on japanese 蛮族).
EDIT by Cheese: RESOLVED
Scene#: 0353
Original Version
"A day can last for a hundred years. A hundred years can last for a day...... That's why, once she's left, an elf can't come back easily."
Corrected Version
"A day can last for a hundred years. A hundred years can last for a day...... That's why, once we leave, us elves can't go back easily."
EDIT by Phlebas - that could count as a 'generic she' I suppose, politically correct and all ;P but yeah might as well change. (although for all the evidence we have, all elves these days are female
)Scene #401:
"We have no intention of turning back! We have business up ahead! We've got no time to listen do your songs!"
"We have no intention of turning back! We have business up ahead! We've got no time to listen to your songs!" (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - RESOLVED
I feel like I have a new Brother... I..."
Should "Brother" be capitalized? I suppose it should be kept that way due to the formal version Riannon always uses...
EDIT by Phlebas - RESOLVED
Scene #403:
"What happened after that is a well known story, but..."
"What happened after that is a well-known story, but..." (Missing hyphen)
EDIT by Phlebas - RESOLVED
"You're rebuking arthur, reminding him of his oaths, and having him fulfil his duty."
"You're rebuking Arthur, reminding him of his oaths, and having him fulfill his duty." (Capitalization of Arthur; fulfil is a variant of fulfill, but the latter is more common)
EDIT by Phlebas - RESOLVED
Scene #404:
"Aren't these a hinderance when running?"
"Aren't these a hindrance when running?" (Misspelling)
Scene #2000:
"Your right."
"You're right." (Missing verb)
EDIT by Phlebas - RESOLVED
Scene #2211:
My built up tension ran through my penis, and surged inside of Octavia, who until now had not been defiled by anyone.
My built-up tension ran through my penis, and surged inside of Octavia, who until now had not been defiled by anyone. (Missing hyphen... well, both versions work... but hyphens are sexy)
EDIT by Phlebas - RESOLVED
I lay down next to Octavia, and lent her my arms as a pillow. It felt like a very natural thing to do.
I laid down next to Octavia, and lent her my arms as a pillow. It felt like a very natural thing to do.
(The conflicting tenses--lay:present/lent:past--feels awkward; the sentence might flow better using "laid" instead of "lay," but the current sentence works too)
EDIT by Phlebas - working as intended, it's the past tense of 'lie' : http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/lie ; "laid" is the past tense of "lay" which is a different word, http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/lay%5B1%5D
scene 0150
when Arawn says
Thank you. I'm grateful.
his name box doesn't show up.
--
in this case even tough Arawn is narrating and not talking his name box show up.
EDIT by Cheese: RESOLVED
#0393
Ogam:
"Strangly, there are no reports of soldiers who violated regulations being sent home to the mainland......"
Strangely spelt wrong.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"Crack"
no punctuation.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
#2610
"(Ermin is...... I see......)"
Shouldn't Arawn's box appear here?
#0401
Taliesin:
"Kukuku......hahaha"
Punctuation
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #602:
With the tip of my finger, wet with her slippery fluid, I poked the small protruberance above her slit.
With the tip of my finger, wet with her slippery fluid, I poked the small protuberance above her slit. (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"... You're... (crying?)"
I don't recall him saying "crying," but I wasn't listening very closely either... well, it probably wouldn't be difficult to confirm if "(crying?)" is present inside parenthesis in the original text.
Scene #604:
"Even if I don't show it out, I am always relying on you... Even now..."
"Even if I don't show it, I am always relying on you... Even now..." ("out" is unnecessary)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #609:
"Just a little more... if I can just climb I little higher... One, two...!!"
"Just a little more... if I can just climb a little higher... One, two...!!" (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #612:
"You intending to occupy me here in order to have him go on his own, but... He won't head to Gorsedd Arawn like you're expecting..."
"You intended to occupy me here in order to have him go on his own, but... He won't head to Gorsedd Arawn like you're expecting..." (Wrong tense?)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #2411:
"H, how far are you going to insert it...!"
"H, how far are you going to insert it...?" (Interrogative punctuation)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #2604:
"Even thought it was as I said..."
"Even though it was as I said..." (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #2612:
Ermin trembled in shyness, and pleaded itermitently. Her breath became strangely hot.
Ermin trembled in shyness, and pleaded intermittently. Her breath became strangely hot. (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #6004:
"It's an epigram. The contents are... Well, I can tell you it's an old worn out gravestone."
"It's an epigram. The contents are... Well, I can tell you it's an old worn-out gravestone." (Missing hyphen)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
scene 2811
When Arawn narrates
For some reason, there's one dose left.
his name box show up when it shouldn't
When Arawns says
Hmm?
his name doesn't show up
scene 0840
Myrddin
Why do you say that?
You are standing before me, aren you not?
should be
You are standing before me, are you not?
EDIT by Phlebas -resolved
scene 0970
Lucifer says
Now, go forth as you wish.
With your own legs! With you own will!
should be
With your own legs! With your own will!
EDIT by Phlebas -resolved
Scene 0553
Ogam: "Arawn-sama wanted to to be buried here...so when he fell during the great war, his coffin was buried right alongside."
-> it should be:"Arawn-sama wanted to be buried here...so when he fell during the great war, his coffin was buried right alongside."
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #0353, Limwris says:
Is something wrong, Arthur?
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
However you here the voice actor say
Is something wrong, Arthur-sama?
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene 2501, Arawn narrative says:
Lost in though, I kept walking, and before I knew it I had neared the livestock farm.
It should be:
Lost in thought, I kept walking, and before I knew it I had neared the livestock farm.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #2601, Arawn thinks:
It couldn't be helped, so I stared at Ermin and Limwris doing to the laundry.
It should be:
It couldn't be helped, so I stared at Ermin and Limwris doing the laundry.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
scene 28060 - got the "text too long" error and also the scene is in japanese (its a special scene when you enter weapon shop)
EDIT by Phlebas - Yeah those are fixed now but not in current release, the last secret shop scenes were untranslated and had managed to escape our radar because you get the shop so rarely.
scene 0840
Ogam says
You really.......are a fool.
Even though Myrddin has been waiting so long for you to realize.......
should be Myrddin-sama by listening to Ogam's voice.
EDIT by Phlebas - fixed
Scene #607
"Long ago, they make the castle walls out of rammed earth as a fortification. They're layered on level after level like the growth rings on an old tree."
"Long ago, they made the castle walls out of rammed earth as a fortification. They're layered on level after level like the growth rings on an old tree." (Wrong tense)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"An age of bronze was the next to arrive. This was also a splendid era, but... In the end, the bronze rusted away under the weight of time..."
"An Age of Bronze was the next to arrive. This was also a splendid era, but... In the end, the bronze rusted away under the weight of time..." (Capitalization; I assume this was fixed after the same thing was caught in Scene #110, but just in case...)
"And now, the age of iron has begun. But, this age too, will soon..."
"And now, the Age of Iron has begun. But, this age too, will soon..." (Capitalization; I assume this was fixed after the same thing was caught in Scene #110, but just in case...)
Scene #633:
"It seems you finally understand... Human."
"It seems you finally understand... human." (Unnecessary capitalization)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #634:
"Yes, sir!" (x2)
"Yes, Sir!" (Capitalization; frankly, I prefer it without capitalization, but it has been capitalized in past occurrences... so keep it consistent)
EDIT by Phlebas - it's been mostly without caps, went thru the whole script now to make "sir" consistent
Scene #641:
"When the Demon King's army attacked, they set a fire upon our beautiful Londinium, and started a riot. It is quite a problematic situation for me as the Mayor too."
"When the Demon King's army attacked, they set a fire upon our beautiful Londinium, and started a riot. It is quite a problematic situation for me as the mayor too." (Unnecessary capitalization, unless all other instances of "mayor" are also capitalized when used as a reference to the mayor of Londinium)
EDIT by Phlebas that was a bit tricky, but went thru the script and capitalized Mayor when it's used in stead of name, and when it's used as a title ("Mayor of Londinium"), otherwise lowercased
Scene #675:
"Somehow... I felt that the tone of your harp... was melancholy..."
"Somehow... I felt that the tone of your harp... was melancholic..." (Incorrect form of melancholy to modify a noun)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #2001:
Limwris and Ermin split the ingredients with everyone else, and started cooking. It seems the elves are doing their usual cooking seperately.
Limwris and Ermin split the ingredients with everyone else, and started cooking. It seems the elves are doing their usual cooking separately. (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #2007:
"Ah, wait a second. If you haven't changed your clothes this whole time, could it be that you body is also..."
"Ah, wait a second. If you haven't changed your clothes this whole time, could it be that your body is also..." (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #2711:
"And, I'm one of a kind limited product..."
"And, I'm a one of a kind limited product..." (Missing word; could be fixed in other ways too, I guess...)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #6341:
"I, Ogam, Dragon bearing the Flame of Creation, bear witness to that name! Any who object, come forth now!"
"I, Ogam, dragon bearing the Flame of Creation, bear witness to that name! Any who object, come forth now!" (Unnecessary capitalization unless dragons are considered a specific race)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"Now, Regius... Little King. Will you accept this judgment or not?"
"Little King" wasn't capitalized before this scene (seen in Gaius's parting words) and later during this scene (by Arthur) as well. So consistency-wise, this occurrence shouldn't be capitalized as well... or capitalize all of the other occurrences.
***EDIT by Phlebas -'Little King' as well as 'Great King' fixed up in the whole script
In scene #2505, Arawn says:
It's too late to say no now.
The s in It's seems to be further away then with all the other contractions I have seen in the game. I think there is a space between the apostrophe and the letter s.
EDIT by Phlebas - it was a wrong kind of apostrophe, gj spotting
In scene #0390, Arawn says:
This is the best method for ridding the area around Avalon of the Imperial Army.
In this sentence Imperial Army is capitalized, but in the sentence before this one Imperial Army is not capitalized.
I know that a lot of the names were fixed especially with the different kinds of elves, I just wasn't sure if this was one of the names fixed so I thought I should mention it just to be safe.
EDIT by Phlebas - fixed 'Imperial Army' in whole script
In scene #0392, Arawn says:
He's a slavedriver as usual.
Slave driver is two words not one.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #2503, Arawn thinks:
I took the tableware given to me by Limwris and dried off the moisture. By repeating this simple chore for what seemed like forever, it felt like I might able to achieve a state of non-attachment.
It should be:
I took the tableware given to me by Limwris and dried off the moisture. By repeating this simple chore for what seemed like forever, it felt like I might be able to achieve a state of non-attachment.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
#0614
Llyr:
"We pray for Arawn-sama!"
We'll?
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
#06341
Everyone:
"Hahahahahahaha"
Punctuation.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #751:
"Hey! Over there, stop complaining! I thought of a lot of things, but its already too much trouble! I'll make it simple!"
"Hey! Over there, stop complaining! I thought of a lot of things, but it's already too much trouble! I'll make it simple!" (Missing apostrophe)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #790:
"T, thats... Arawn-sama, you don't care about the stew that I made? Do you not care about me either?"
"T, that's... Arawn-sama, you don't care about the stew that I made? Do you not care about me either?" (Missing apostrophe)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"Shut up! Where we you eavesdropping from, you stupid brother?!"
"Shut up! Where were you eavesdropping from, you stupid brother?!" (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"You use a small needle and thin thread to make fine stitches. It's delicate work. It's totally different them stitching up your wounds from being bitten by boars in the forest!"
"You use a small needle and thin thread to make fine stitches. It's delicate work. It's totally different than stitching up your wounds from being bitten by boars in the forest!" (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"I lied down on the bed with the piping hot Gael stew."
"I lie/lay down on the bed with the piping hot Gael stew." (... I think I have this right... lie is the present tense of reclining, whereas lay is the past tense of reclining...)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #792:
"You were too promiscuous in your youth, and grew tired of men and women both, and now you're only interesting in elves!"
"You were too promiscuous in your youth, and grew tired of both men and women, and now you're only interested in elves!" (Awkward placement of "both" as a conjunction; Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"Before I could return to the Brigantes villages, the sun set... the night grew late... and the moon rose."
"Before I could return to the Brigantes village, the sun set... the night grew late... and the moon rose." (Unless there are multiple villages...)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #2002:
Having lost his weapon, Arthur's was driven by his soldier instinct to try to grapple with me, but I pointed my sword at his eyes, and that too was settled.
Having lost his weapon, Arthur was driven by his soldier's instinct to try to grapple with me, but I pointed my sword at his eyes, and that too was settled. (Incorrectly placed possessive apostrophe)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #2004:
Llyr covered her mouth with her hand to stifle a laughter.
Llyr covered her mouth with her hand to stifle a laugh. (Singular laugh; an alternative fix would be removing "a" instead, leaving the plural laughter)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"Hey, Elf."
"Hey, elf." (Unnecessary capitalization)
"Hey, Elf! Look!"
"Hey, elf! Look!" (Unnecessary capitalization)
EDIT by Phlebas - normally uncapitalized, but this is an address form, looks better capitalized (n.b. 'Elf-san')
Scene #2111:
"I said there was nothing about you I was unsatisfied with, but..."
"I said there was nothing about you I was dissatisfied with, but..." (I vaguely recall dissatisfied=/=unsatisfied, and since dissatisfied was the term used earlier...)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
When the sensation suddenly stopped, Riannons made a dejected face, but even to the end, she wasn't able to say it clearly.
When the sensation suddenly stopped, Riannon made a dejected face, but even to the end, she wasn't able to say it clearly. (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"Hyuu! Au! Kyau!"
"Hyuu! Au! Kyau!" (Odd spacing)
EDIT by Phlebas - I think it's intentional to signal there was some time between them
Scene #2412:
I grabbed her wrist and stopper her from masturbating.
I grabbed her wrist and stopped her from masturbating. (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
My semen fushed through her vagina. Ermin's lips trembled slightly.
My semen flushed through her vagina. Ermin's lips trembled slightly. (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #2811:
"I' m fine, really...! I'm really OK! Uu... uuuu!"
"I'm fine, really...! I'm really OK! Uu... uuuu!" (Incorrect apostrophe glyph)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #801:
"It seems it's becoming a nest of monsters. They appear to have noticed us."
"It seems it's become a nest of monsters. They appear to have noticed us." (The cave had already become a nest of monsters, though I suppose it could be said that the cave is in the process of becoming a larger nest of monsters...)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #804:
"Understood. Sir Taliesin, could you take care of it for a while? Once its able to take to air on its own, it can fly away to its parents."
"Understood. Sir Taliesin, could you take care of it for a while? Once it's able to take to air on its own, it can fly away to its parents." (Missing apostrophe)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #835:
"Your must cultivate your ability to see the world from different angles... to feel the fluctuations of the world."
"You must cultivate your ability to see the world from different angles... to feel the fluctuations of the world." (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #840:
"But... that is fine. After all, life is is a journey of traveling your own path, and nobody else's."
"But... that is fine. After all, life is a journey of traveling your own path, and nobody else's." (Repeated "is")
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #850:
"What a weak race... Like this, they could not possible survive the long winter."
"What a weak race... Like this, they could not possibly survive the long winter." (Incorrect form of "possible" to modify a verb)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #860:
"The act of treason that Myrddin committed... Was truly a great sin, that shook this world. The fact that his body was destroyed is still not atonement enough."
"The act of treason that Myrddin committed... was truly a great sin that shook this world. The fact that his body was destroyed is still not atonement enough." (Unnecessary capitalization; sentence fragment)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved (new lines after a manual line break+key wait+space start with a capital letter for stylistic purposes)
Descending to the surface alone so soon after joining the 12 Angels would invite unneccesary suspicion, but...
Descending to the surface alone so soon after joining the 12 Angels would invite unnecessary suspicion, but... (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #900:
"Achoo. How cold. If I stay here too long, I'll freeze. After enjoying the scenery of the Northern lands, I should go back."
"Achoo. How cold. If I stay here too long, I'll freeze. After enjoying the scenery of the Northern Lands, I should go back." (I thought all parts of a specific geographic region should be capitalized, but evidently I was wrong since my last fix on this type of error wasn't implemented, heh... well, I'll post this anyway.)
EDIT by Phlebas - going thru the all the scripts to fix the points of compass appropriately to context (interesting side note, nothing ever happens in the west, that direction doesn't come up in the whole script lol)
Scene #950:
"Arawn... stand back. From here, this isn't the path for you to walk. This is a direct road to the underworld. Its path doesn't cross with the road of kings."
"Arawn... stand back. From here, this isn't the path for you to walk. This is a direct road to the underworld. Its path doesn't cross with the road of kings." (Just pointing out that "road of the kings" has also been used in reference to the same thing... so refer to it in a consistent manner; personally, I prefer "road of kings")
"It's fine... you've always done more than enough. Now, stand back. And continue following the way of the king. For us."
"It's fine... you've always done more than enough. Now, stand back. And continue following the way of the king. For us." (See above)
EDIT by Phlebas - ah good spot, could've sworn that'd already be consistent after all our debate on it.
Scene #960:
"That is your destination. A world lying in the pit of a dim abyss... that is the Earth. How different is it from our heavenly word, overflowing with light?"
"That is your destination. A world lying in the pit of a dim abyss... that is the Earth. How different is it from our heavenly world, overflowing with light?" (Misspelling)
Scene #970:
"... You've regained your real words... These flowers herald the coming of spring, so they are called 'Primula'. Understand? They're Primula."
The notation above 'Primula' is supposed to be "First," but it is rendered "Firs[a squiggly character]."
EDIT by Cheese: Resolved
"...Spring ...Came?"
"...Spring... came?" (Spacing; unnecessary capitalization)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #980:
"... I definitely witnessed it... Taliesin. You... you... Giant Idiot!!!!"
"... I definitely witnessed it... Taliesin. You... you... giant idiot!!!!" (... unless "Giant Idiot" is now a title, anyway)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
I shouted as loudly as I could into the empty air, until it hurt.
I shouted as loudly as I could into the empty air until it hurt. (Unnecessary comma)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #1020:
"That's right. It's already clear that they have descended to earth. The seal has deteriorated over many years, so it's lost its effect. So, we have to use this directly."
"That's right. It's already clear that they have descended to the earth / Earth. The seal has deteriorated over many years, so it's lost its effect. So, we have to use this directly." (Capitalize Earth if referring to the planet)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #1021:
"Yes, all of the elves know this place. In the north of Albion... the field where the sun sets. As a proof of victory, the throne of the 13th king stands over the 12 columns."
"Yes, all of the elves know this place. In the North of Albion... in the field where the sun sets. As a proof of victory, the throne of the 13th king stands over the 12 columns." (Cardinal directions that are part of specific geographic regions should be capitalized; missing word?)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved as above
Scene #1024:
"T, that's... I won't let you lay a finger on my brother!"
"T, that's... I won't let you lay a finger on my Brother!" (Arthur has always been referred to as "Brother" in Riannon's speech, so keep it consistent)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #1025:
I knew at a glance that he was clearly a being different from an elf. Perhaps... a high ranking young nobleman of the dragons.
I knew at a glance that he was clearly a being different from an elf. Perhaps... a high-ranking young nobleman of the dragons. (Missing hyphen)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"I must fulfill the duty imposed on my by the heavens. So, I can't give you even one."
"I must fulfill the duty imposed on me by the heavens. So, I can't give you even one." (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #1026:
"Control Station...? Protection...? Hahahahahaha, ahahahahaha! What a riot!"
"Control station...? Protection...? Hahahahahaha, ahahahahaha! What a riot!" (Unnecessary capitalization, unless all other instances of "control station" are capitalized as well)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"That the hopes of everyone living on earth were put into it! But even so, you're trampling on that, and making Avalon into hope's grave!"
"That the hopes of everyone living on Earth were put into it! But even so, you're trampling on that, and making Avalon into hope's grave!" (Capitalize Earth if referring to the planet)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved (as well as the other incorrect capitalizations of 'earth' across the scripts
"That is... because we are imperfect... it's our punishment. Yes, we're completely useless. We were created to be the rulers of the earth, but we failed to meet their expectations."
"That is... because we are imperfect... it's our punishment. Yes, we're completely useless. We were created to be the rulers of the Earth, but we failed to meet their expectations." (Capitalize Earth if referring to the planet)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved (as well as the other incorrect capitalizations of 'earth' across the scripts
"Who on earth... are you?"
"Who on Earth... are you?" (Capitalize Earth if referring to the planet)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved (as well as the other incorrect capitalizations of 'earth' across the scripts
"... Impossible. No one on this earth should have the ability to overturn the 12 Angels' decision..."
"... Impossible. No one on this Earth should have the ability to overturn the 12 Angels' decision..." (Capitalize Earth if referring to the planet... gahhh it's getting tiring typing these out...
... just take a look at all occurrences of "earth" and decide between the planet or dirt/ground)EDIT by Phlebas - resolved (as well as the other incorrect capitalizations of 'earth' across the scripts
Scene #1030:
"Did they even blow away their own allies with the Merkadis...?"
"Did they blow away even their own allies with the Merkadis...?" (Original sentence works, but placing "even" closer to "their own allies" better emphasizes the meaning)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"Messenger! Is the miner elf brigade still not here?! Make them hurry!"
"Messenger! Is the Miner Elf brigade still not here?! Make them hurry!" (Capitalization of specific race)
EDIT by Phlebas - all race names fixed as stated earlier
"In the long battle, the majority of the elves died.
... Avalon, the last clean land, has become a battlefield, and been contaminated with Gravitas."
"In the long battle, the majority of the elves died.
... Avalon, the last clean land, has become a battlefield, and been contaminated with gravitas." ("gravitas" has been used lowercase before, so either uppercase all instances or lowercase all of them; capitalized instance also present in Dawnwin's item description)
EDIT by Phlebas - fixed all gravitas in script into lowercase, gotta take this up with cheese tho
"Hehe, you're such a showoff. Even to the end, you never said your innermost wish."
"Hehe, you're such a show-off. Even to the end, you never said your innermost wish." ("show-off" has been consistently used until now)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #1100:
"Hehehe... That information was to deceive the senate. The truth is... he has been here the whole time."
"Hehehe... That information was to deceive the Senate. The truth is... he has been here the whole time." (Capitalization of proper noun)
EDIT by Phlebas - fixed 'Senate' in the whole script
Related note: Shouldn't "emperor" also be capitalized when used in reference to the emperor of the Holy Empire? For example:
"You're saying... this is the emperor of the Holy Empire? Impossible! The emperor should be in his palace on Capri Island! Why would he be here?"
"You're saying... this is the Emperor of the Holy Empire? Impossible! The Emperor should be in his palace on Capri Island! Why would he be here?" (There are other occurrences, but they show up all over this scene, and I don't feel like typing all of them at 4 in the morning, heh)
EDIT by Phlebas: (emperor should only be capitalized when used before the name of the emperor or of the empire, thus capitalized "Emperor of the Holy Empire" but that's the only instance in the script)
Scene #1102:
"With our current strength, breaking these walls is impossible. We can't escape... Even from way we came in. The flames coming from the Merkadis's remains have already engulfed most of the tower."
"With our current strength, breaking these walls is impossible. We can't escape... Even from the way we came in. The flames coming from the Merkadis's remains have already engulfed most of the tower." (Missing word)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"Who are them huge guys? Your friends?"
"Who are those huge guys? Your friends?" (I believe the original sentence is correct, and is simply conveying Morgan's... unique style of speech; however, if not, the correct word is "those")
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #1110:
"Hya! What a huge Obelisk."
"Hya! What a huge obelisk." (All previous occurrences of "obelisk" have been lowercase)
EDIT by Phlebas - fixed obelisk in the whole script
Scene #8101
"... What a cruel thing.
... I wonder what in the world they did.
... A sin deserving of such a cruel punishment
... Does such a sin exist in this world...?"
"... What a cruel thing.
... I wonder what in the world they did.
... A sin deserving of such a cruel punishment.
... Does such a sin exist in this world...?" (The first two lines ended with periods, so stylistically the third line should end with one as well...)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #9000
"Hmm, as expected from an miner elf. They're well made. You must be doing well in your principal occupation as a weapon merchant too."
"Hmm, as expected from a Miner Elf. They're well made. You must be doing well in your principal occupation as a weapon merchant too." (Incorrect form of "a"; Capitalization of specific race)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved as above
Scene #9001
"We'll recruit reinforcements from Londinium. Once we've gathered all of the soldiers, we'll head North at once!"
"We'll recruit reinforcements from Londinium. Once we've gathered all of the soldiers, we'll head north at once!" (General compass directions don't need capitalization)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved as above
"Basically its a mountain that would cease to exist in an instant without magic."
"Basically it's a mountain that would cease to exist in an instant without magic." (Missing apostrophe)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"That's right! And not just any avalanche! An avalanche of an unbelievable scale, with an entire mountain crumbling!"
"That's right! And not just any avalanche! An avalanche of unbelievable scale, with an entire mountain crumbling!" (Unnecessary word)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"We'll have the main army advance as bait. If we march straight towards Palladium, they'll get uneasy, and take the shortest route South. In other words, through the base of Mt. Corus."
"We'll have the main army advance as bait. If we march straight towards Palladium, they'll get uneasy, and take the shortest route south. In other words, through the base of Mt. Corus." (General compass directions don't need capitalization)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved as above
"We won't give them time to make new soldiers! We'll cross the ravine by filling it with ice and their corpses, charge North at once, and topple the powerless Palladium!"
"We won't give them time to make new soldiers! We'll cross the ravine by filling it with ice and their corpses, charge north at once, and topple the powerless Palladium!" (General compass directions don't need capitalization)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved as above
Scene #7031:
"Is this ecstasy? I'm free of worldy thoughts..."
"Is this ecstasy? I'm free of worldly thoughts..." (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #7040:
"... They're even more demonic that me."
"... They're even more demonic than me."
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #7060:
"That's right! You can get an an arrangement CD at Comiket, Arawn-sama!"
"That's right! You can get an arrangement CD at Comiket, Arawn-sama!" (Duplicated word)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #7100:
"A good villain will be ressurected as soon as he requests it."
"A good villain will be resurrected as soon as he requests it." (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"You're too late to realize it now! Now, Awaken! The new Demon King!!"
"You're too late to realize it now! Now, awaken! The new Demon King!!" (Unnecessary capitalization)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"You don't get it. Even if you've ressurrected them, we have their most treasured fantastic items!"
"You don't get it. Even if you've resurrected them, we have their most treasured fantastic items!" (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #7102:
"But... one day, I'll definitely be revived... Until that day, I'll leave my life it your hands... Gahahahahaha... farewell."
"But... one day, I'll definitely be revived... Until that day, I'll leave my life in your hands... Gahahahahaha... farewell." (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"He ran out of cliche villain phrases."
"He ran out of cliché villain phrases." (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"As soon as we return... We'll begin the creation of the 'Leaf Millenium'!"
"As soon as we return... We'll begin the creation of the 'Leaf Millennium'!" (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"There's only one rule in the 'Leaf Millenium'!"
"There's only one rule in the 'Leaf Millennium'!" (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Idle note: Leaf Millennium... only one rule... did the scenario writer just make a Gungrave reference?!
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
"Full 24 hour shifts! Monday, Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday, Thursday, Friday, Friday! Go from morning to night, until you die!"
"Full 24 hour shifts! Monday, Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday, Thursday, Friday, Friday! Go from morning to night, until you die!" (Are the repeated days intended?)
EDIT by Phlebas - I assumed they were but gotta check with cheese
And so... everyone who had gathered at the leaf tower disappeared back to their world like the wind.
And so... everyone who had gathered at the Leaf Tower disappeared back to their world like the wind. (Capitalization)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Also in scene #0394:
The word Puer is used by Gauis:
Yo, It's been a while.
Demon King and Puer.
How are you doing......?
Puer doesn't have the word Boy over it in this case, but then in scene #03941, Gauis says:
Hahaha, you've gotten pretty strong, Puer.
Boy is back over Puer in this scene. I am pretty sure every other time I have seen the word Puer it has had Boy above it.
EDIT by Phlebas - I guess it's a bit inconsistent really, but we're sticking to the original script's usage of furigana without adding or removing them.
In scene #0460, Arawn says:
Ogam, you'd like to try that arm again after such a long time, right?
That once so great. Or has your arm gotten rusty from your long years of wandering?
What is up with the sentence That once so great. It seems like it should be connected to something more and is instead waiting there for something to do. I don't know exactly how it would be fixed but felt I should bring notice to it.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #2604, Arawn says:
Uh......well, I guess this means it's not good to doubt someone without reason, I guess.
The second I guess is rather redundant and unnecessary.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #0553, Arawn says:
What this all about?
It should be:
What's this all about?
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #0602, Arawn action:
In the same scene, Arawn action:
I lay heavily breathing Riannon on the bed.
Shouldn't it be:
I lay a heavily breathing Riannon on the bed.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #0610, Arthur calls Ogam staff officer. Staff Officer should be capitalized as it is a title (like Staff Sargent).
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #0607, Aide says:
Yes, Sir. Understood.
Then, let's move into next phase immediately!
It should be:
Yes, Sir. Understood.
Then, let's move onto the next phase immediately!
I believe onto is more accurate than into in this case. I could be wrong, however the is definitely missing from the original version.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #2613, Arawn thought:
In addition to being Ermin being completely naked, my penis was already towering right beneath her.
It should be:
In addition to Ermin being completely naked, my penis was already towering right beneath her.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #2001, Arawn action:
Surrounded on both sides, I kicked the ground and lept to the side.
It should be:
Surrounded on both sides, I kicked the ground and leapt to the side.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #2811, Epona says:
To uphold my merchant's ethics, I'll become I demon if I have to.
It should be:
To uphold my merchant's ethics, I'll become a demon if I have to.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In the same scene, Arawn action:
Slip. My tip of my penis slides up out from her slit.
It should be:
Slip. The tip of my penis slides up and out from her slit.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #0735, Taliesin says:
He wants us remember the name of the influential man who opened the tournament and gathered all these people.
It should be:
He wants us to remember the name of the influential man who opened the tournament and gathered all these people.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #2004, Arawn thought:
Just as Llyrs said, the kids around me were quiet....
It should be:
Just as Llyr said, the kids around me were quiet....
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #2506, Arawn action:
Her chest?
I gently twist Llyrs nipples.
It should be:
Her chest?
I gently twist Llyr's nipples.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #2111, Riannon says:
Uh, um, if you're going to be stay up, then can I prepare something for you?
It should either be
Uh, um, if you're going to be staying up, then can I prepare something for you?
or
Uh, um, if you're going to stay up, then can I prepare something for you?
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #0830, Myrddin says:
That was my intention as soon as soon as I set eyes upon this infant angel.
It should be:
That was my intention as soon as I set eyes upon this infant angel.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
scene 1102
when Rathy says
The mountain elves' kingdom is a good place too, Arawn.
should be Arawn-sama by listening to Rathy's voice
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #1030, Pwyll says:
I'm not the only who is sad......but I went wild in grief.
It should be:
I'm not the only one who is sad......but I went wild with grief.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Napolitan.... Rush!!