Beta v0.9 Error Report Thread

[Licky]

scene 2811
Epona says

Welcome! The antidote for being exposed to a garm's breath, right......? I've bundled up enough
for all the girls! Once they've drunk it once, they'll be fine after that!
should be
Once they've drunk it, they'll be fine after that! (once is repeated)
EDIT by Phlebas -resolved
When Arawn narrates
For some reason, there's one dose left.
his name box show up when it shouldn't

When Arawns says
Hmm?
his name doesn't show up

scene 0840
Myrddin
Why do you say that?
You are standing before me, aren you not?
should be
You are standing before me, are you not?
EDIT by Phlebas -resolved
scene 0970
Lucifer says
Now, go forth as you wish.
With your own legs! With you own will!

should be
With your own legs! With your own will!
EDIT by Phlebas -resolved

[hinorashi004]

Scene 0572:
Gaius: "Hahaha, you damn rats have caused quite a ruckus. Thank to you, our outposts are crumbling."
-> it should be: "Hahaha, your damn rats have caused quite a ruckus..."
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene 0551
Arthur: "I'm sure it was a fine grave a long time ago, but..."
-> it should be:"I'm sure it was a fine grave long time ago, but..."
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene 0551
Arthur: "You're right, the basement really is in good shape."
-> it should be: "You're right, the basement is really in good shape."
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene 0554
Octavia: " All right we finished off all the Talos, but what do we do now..."
-> it should be: "All right! We finished all off the Talos, but what do we do now..."
EDIT by Phlebas - It's "All right. We finished off all the Talos, but......" with a line break between sentences, are you sure you got that right?
Scene 0553
Ogam: "Arawn-sama wanted to to be buried here...so when he fell during the great war, his coffin was buried right alongside."
-> it should be:"Arawn-sama wanted to be buried here...so when he fell during the great war, his coffin was buried right alongside."
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

[DeamonCross]

In scene #0353, Limwris says:

Is something wrong, Arthur?
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
However you here the voice actor say

Is something wrong, Arthur-sama?
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene 2501, Arawn narrative says:

Lost in though, I kept walking, and before I knew it I had neared the livestock farm.

It should be:

Lost in thought, I kept walking, and before I knew it I had neared the livestock farm.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
In scene #2601, Arawn thinks:

It couldn't be helped, so I stared at Ermin and Limwris doing to the laundry.

It should be:

It couldn't be helped, so I stared at Ermin and Limwris doing the laundry.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

[shinjin977]

scene 28060 - got the "text too long" error and also the scene is in japanese (its a special scene when you enter weapon shop)

EDIT by Phlebas - Yeah those are fixed now but not in current build, the last secret shop scenes were untranslated and had managed to escape our radar because you get the shop so rarely.

[Licky]

scene 0840
Ogam says
You really.......are a fool.
Even though Myrddin has been waiting so long for you to realize.......
should be Myrddin-sama by listening to Ogam's voice.

EDIT by Phlebas - fixed

[Tatsu]

#0450
"Ah, thank you!"
Taliesin's box doesn't appear.

#500
"Your Majesty......"
Elmin's/???? box doesn't appear

#0612
Ogam:
"You intending to occupy me here in order to have him go on his own, butt......"
Change You to Your, or Intending to Intend.
EDIT by Phlebas - already reported and resolved


#0614
Llyr:
"We pray for Arawn-sama!"
We'll?
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
#06341
Everyone:
"Hahahahahahaha"
Punctuation.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

[Nex]

Scene 2761
"afairs"
Check spelling.
EDIT by Phlebas - already reported and fixed
Scene 2500
"tasty cold"
Check grammar.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene 2410
"It seems she can't have one"
Change to past tense.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene 2505
"She makes a slippery, sticky sound"
Change to past tense.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Imperial Shoes Tooltip
"feel good to wear"
Check grammar.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

[Moratorius]

First, several comments on some of the... strange... corrections made earlier:

Scene 0572:
Gaius: "Hahaha, you damn rats have caused quite a ruckus. Thank to you, our outposts are crumbling."
-> it should be: "Hahaha, your damn rats have caused quite a ruckus..."
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

Isn't the original sentence correct? "Rats" is being used as a euphemism for Arawn's party, which has been raiding the outposts for foods (like rats).

Scene 0551
Arthur: "I'm sure it was a fine grave a long time ago, but..."
-> it should be:"I'm sure it was a fine grave long time ago, but..."
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

"a long time ago" is the correct time expression...

Scene 0551
Arthur: "You're right, the basement really is in good shape."
-> it should be: "You're right, the basement is really in good shape."
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

Does reversing the order make a difference? The original placement of "really" worked, since the emphasis is still on the confirmation of the state of being in good shape (due to the uncertainty of the party after seeing the derelict upper levels)...
EDIT by Phlebas - no worries, "Resolved" is an umbrella term for when we're too lazy to comment on everything
... anyway, onwards:

Scene #607
"Long ago, they make the castle walls out of rammed earth as a fortification. They're layered on level after level like the growth rings on an old tree."
"Long ago, they made the castle walls out of rammed earth as a fortification. They're layered on level after level like the growth rings on an old tree." (Wrong tense)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

Scene #614
"First, there was an age of gold. It was a glorious age, but time passed... All the gold melted away..."
"First, there was an Age of Gold. It was a glorious age, but time passed... All the gold melted away..." (Capitalization; I assume this was fixed after the same thing was caught in Scene #110, but just in case...)
EDIT by Phlebas - as stated, the Ages are fixed throughout the script already

"Then, an age of silver began. It also flourished, but... Before long, the silver disappeared to the bottom of the sea..."
"Then, an Age of Silver began. It also flourished, but... Before long, the silver disappeared to the bottom of the sea..." (Capitalization; I assume this was fixed after the same thing was caught in Scene #110, but just in case...)

"An age of bronze was the next to arrive. This was also a splendid era, but... In the end, the bronze rusted away under the weight of time..."
"An Age of Bronze was the next to arrive. This was also a splendid era, but... In the end, the bronze rusted away under the weight of time..." (Capitalization; I assume this was fixed after the same thing was caught in Scene #110, but just in case...)

"And now, the age of iron has begun. But, this age too, will soon..."
"And now, the Age of Iron has begun. But, this age too, will soon..." (Capitalization; I assume this was fixed after the same thing was caught in Scene #110, but just in case...)

"Everyone in the castle! I have an important announcement to make! We're abandoning the Eastern swamp and the old Northern town!"
"Everyone in the castle! I have an important announcement to make! We're abandoning the eastern swamp / Eastern Swamp and the old northern town / Old Northern Town!" (if they're proper nouns, all of the words should be capitalized; if not, none of the words should be capitalized... I think)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

Scene #633:
"It seems you finally understand... Human."
"It seems you finally understand... human." (Unnecessary capitalization)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

Scene #634:
"Yes, sir!" (x2)
"Yes, Sir!" (Capitalization; frankly, I prefer it without capitalization, but it has been capitalized in past occurrences... so keep it consistent)
EDIT by Phlebas - it's been mostly without caps, went thru the whole script now to make "sir" consistent

Scene #641:
"When the Demon King's army attacked, they set a fire upon our beautiful Londinium, and started a riot. It is quite a problematic situation for me as the Mayor too."
"When the Demon King's army attacked, they set a fire upon our beautiful Londinium, and started a riot. It is quite a problematic situation for me as the mayor too." (Unnecessary capitalization, unless all other instances of "mayor" are also capitalized when used as a reference to the mayor of Londinium)
EDIT by Phlebas that was a bit tricky, but went thru the script and capitalized Mayor when it's used in stead of name, and when it's used as a title ("Mayor of Londinium"), otherwise lowercased

"Yes, of course. I believe that you will be able to win, hence I have proposed this plan... Ah! Could it be, you are not confident in yourselves?"
"Yes, of course. I believe that you will be able to win, hence I have proposed this plan... Ah! Could it be, you are not confident in yourself?" (If he's just addressing Arthur, as the exchange seems to imply, it should be singular... the situation is probably clearer in the original script, since there's a difference between singular and plural "you")
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

Scene #675:
"Somehow... I felt that the tone of your harp... was melancholy..."
"Somehow... I felt that the tone of your harp... was melancholic..." (Incorrect form of melancholy to modify a noun)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

Scene #2001:
Limwris and Ermin split the ingredients with everyone else, and started cooking. It seems the elves are doing their usual cooking seperately.
Limwris and Ermin split the ingredients with everyone else, and started cooking. It seems the elves are doing their usual cooking separately. (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

I can't escape taking at least one bite... I don't think that'll be a lethal dose...
I can't escape without taking at least one bite... I don't think that'll be a lethal dose... (Missing word)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

Scene #2007:
"Jeez... you're just quibbling. You've led such a slovenly lifestyle that you've become like this, Arawn-sama?"
"Jeez... you're just quibbling. You've led such a slovenly lifestyle that you've become like this, Arawn-sama." (I believe the original sentence is correct, since I heard an interrogative tone... but in case that's not how it is in the original script, the proper punctuation is a probably a period.)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

"Ah, wait a second. If you haven't changed your clothes this whole time, could it be that you body is also..."
"Ah, wait a second. If you haven't changed your clothes this whole time, could it be that your body is also..." (Misspelling)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

Scene #2711:
"And, I'm one of a kind limited product..."
"And, I'm a one of a kind limited product..." (Missing word; could be fixed in other ways too, I guess...)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

Idle note: I'm glad that the h-scenes for the two DFC, Ermin and Epona, didn't have descriptions of their hymens being torn... unlike most of the other first experience h-scenes...
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved ...actually I don't remember any of them having those but maybe I just have a short memory.

Scene #6341:
"I, Ogam, Dragon bearing the Flame of Creation, bear witness to that name! Any who object, come forth now!"
"I, Ogam, dragon bearing the Flame of Creation, bear witness to that name! Any who object, come forth now!" (Unnecessary capitalization unless dragons are considered a specific race)
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

"Now, Regius... Little King. Will you accept this judgment or not?"
"Little King" wasn't capitalized before this scene (seen in Gaius's parting words) and later during this scene (by Arthur) as well. So consistency-wise, this occurrence shouldn't be capitalized as well... or capitalize all of the other occurrences.
***EDIT by Phlebas -'Little King' as well as 'Great King' fixed up in the whole script

[DeamonCross]

In scene #2505, Arawn says:

It's too late to say no now.

The s in It's seems to be further away then with all the other contractions I have seen in the game. I think there is a space between the apostrophe and the letter s.
EDIT by Phlebas - it was a wrong kind of apostrophe, gj spotting
In scene #0390, Arawn says:

This is the best method for ridding the area around Avalon of the Imperial Army.
In this sentence Imperial Army is capitalized, but in the sentence before this one Imperial Army is not capitalized.
I know that a lot of the names were fixed especially with the different kinds of elves, I just wasn't sure if this was one of the names fixed so I thought I should mention it just to be safe.
EDIT by Phlebas - fixed 'Imperial Army' in whole script

In scene #0392, Arawn says:
He's a slavedriver as usual.
Slave driver is two words not one.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

In scene #2503, Arawn thinks:
I took the tableware given to me by Limwris and dried off the moisture. By repeating this simple chore for what seemed like forever, it felt like I might able to achieve a state of non-attachment.
It should be:
I took the tableware given to me by Limwris and dried off the moisture. By repeating this simple chore for what seemed like forever, it felt like I might be able to achieve a state of non-attachment.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved

[Marisu]

Scene #0100 Rianna says:

"However......
I came to a realization.
That those jewel-like times would soon enough be over."

Just a bit of nitpicking at the punctuation here, but replacing the period after realization with a comma would probably make reading flow a bit more easily and sound less choppy. You could even go so far as to drop it altogether, actually.


"However......
I came to a realization
that those jewel-like times would soon enough be over."

A bit later than that,

"Learning that so young, I became frightened and never confided in anyone, always crying alone. But then, the one encouraging me, energizing me, and shining unchangingly on me was Akaboshi-sama."

Now this portion's a little awkward to read at first because there's such a sudden tense change here. Learning specifically should be tweaked a little. Also, this is probably just me but starting a sentence with 'but' seems a bit odd.

"I learned that so early, and became frightened and never confided in anyone, always crying alone. Yet the one encouraging me, energizing me, and shining unchangingly on me was Akaboshi-sama."

Well it still sounds awkward, actually. Heheh.

Scene #0100 Rianna again:
"Grant me the determination to surmount this danger... ...
Grant me the courage to do it, no matter what happens, without fear or panic."

'Panic' seems a bit redundant, or rather putting 'fear' before 'panic' since panic is essentially a stronger word for fear. Mind you, I don't know anything about the literal meaning of the sentence in Japanese, but if the quality of being unable to act is needed more from panic then I'd suggest replacing the word with hesitation or something stronger.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #0100 Drwc this time:
"Anyone who objects, come forward at once!
We'll let swords and force decide everything!"

This one doesn't even seem like it needs anything, I just think changing 'swords' to 'blade' would agree more with the word 'force'.

"Anyone who objects, come forward at once!
We'll let blade and force decide everything!"
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #0100
A bit after that Drwc says:
"Everyone left in the dark, before dawn?"

'Everyone' is shaky, since it implies some familiarity Drwc would feel towards the villagers. Seeing as how this is assumably his first time in the village it should probably be changed around a bit.

"They all left in the dark, before dawn?"
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #0100 Drwc(again):
"I'll ask you once more. Where are the rest of the villagers?"

Sounds like a colon would have more effect on the question, and place a bit more emphasis on it as well.

"I'll ask you once more: where are the rest of the villagers?"
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved
Scene #0110 Arawn
"Something hit my head really hard and I let out a cry.
As I felt the pain, I realized what I'd been dealing with until now."

The diction here seems a bit sketchy. Unless the original Japanese uses a basic verb for hitting his head, it might be better to use something like,

"Something struck against my head really hard"

Also, it's probably just me but 'really hard' seems weird as well.
EDIT by Phlebas - resolved